Stuck in Time

My Big Brother

Sitting alone in his white room, with his stiff white sheets to keep in warm
His tattered clothes with his name exposed and his room number on the arm

Trying to remember why he sits in his room or why he’s all alone
Grasping to find the steps he took that led him from his home

Wondering how long he’s lived in this place, overflowing with lost souls
Suddenly focusing on a coffee cup, and this is how it goes

Seventeen years he has been stuck in time, with no memories to give him hope
They will never invade whats left of his brain and this is how he cope’s

Counting the holes on the ceiling tiles in his cold, sterile  hospital room
Getting to thirty and forgetting what he’s doing, he starts his count a new

Looking around to see who he knows, but; not noticing anyone familiar
But the feeling he gets that he’s been here before, seems to him a bit peculiar

How old are his kids, where are they now, when will he get to see them again
unfortunately reality briefly sets in as he realizes time only stopped for him

The mirror is the only reminder he has of the pain he’s had through the years
The deaths, the births and the time he has lost have all flushed away like tears

He will never be the way he was, when he was young and had everything
Why didn’t he listen to us, when we told him to stop his reckless driving

Lost in his head for so many years what to do for him eludes all around
While he is stuck in time, we leave him behind and hope a miracle is found.


31 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Jingle
    Oct 30, 2010 @ 14:50:01

    prayers for him.

    hope that it is a fiction.


  2. Jingle
    Oct 31, 2010 @ 15:32:48

    Happy Halloween to you.
    Hope to see you at our poetry potluck Halloween party tonight. Post a poem on Halloween, or share an old poem unrelated to the theme, link in as soon as we are open, that’s how you get the best result of feedback.
    Feel free to take any awards from this post, enjoy!


  3. 2zpoint
    Oct 31, 2010 @ 18:06:54

    The unluckiest of all of us who have been reckless…the story that we never listen to…I only hope that it’s fiction. Peace be with you and yours!


  4. LoLa
    Oct 31, 2010 @ 19:54:10

    Jingle & 2Zpoint,
    Thank you for your kind words. There are some poems on my blog that are not about me. However, this one is about my brother. It is a sad story and one that is a never ending one so to speak.
    Thanks for your thoughts


    • 2zpoint
      Nov 07, 2010 @ 19:46:12

      I have an autistic brother and he is in his own little world. My mom was part of that world before cancer over took her. He’s too violent when his medication is not right to take a chance on him coming to my house (young children) but I have to over see him.
      When his meds are right he’s just a grown up child with a funny demeanor.
      I tell you these things because I know how hard it can be with no chance for resolution and peace while things are like they are. I know the heart break that comes from the agonizing torture of knowing what life is to my brother. The only good consolation that I have from this is that he is oblivious to what life could really be like. I guess it is true what they say…Ignorance truly is bliss. May peace soothe your heart.


    • Morning
      Nov 10, 2010 @ 10:30:11

      award notice,
      Happy Wednesday!
      Link a poem to Jingle Poetry potluck if you can, I value your support!


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  6. Kumi
    Nov 04, 2010 @ 06:16:17

    Oh sister. hugs for you. I feel your pain


  7. Jingle
    Nov 04, 2010 @ 06:26:49

    Happy Poets Rally,
    thanks for the lovely participation.
    have fun.

    it is your second time,
    so you may want to visit a dozen participants,
    and 6 fresh posts from the list.


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  9. Shashi
    Nov 04, 2010 @ 09:36:06

    Its sad to see this waste of youth and energy in a traffic accident. I find it poignant the way you have portrayed his story. I feel the sadness…

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
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  10. Leo (Leonnyes)
    Nov 04, 2010 @ 10:33:12

    its really sad to see a life gone to a vehicle accident..! as I read from the start, the poem I first thought was of Alzheimer’s.. but it was something just as drastic. I feel your pain, that your words cry out, Lola…

    My Entry For The Rally


  11. umamaheswari anandane
    Nov 04, 2010 @ 10:44:20

    Touching and sad…let miracle happen


  12. Someone Is Special
    Nov 04, 2010 @ 18:15:34

    it is very touching and sad.. I know how hard it is to take as I have experienced it with my frend.

    Three Knots

    Happy Rally !

    –Someone Is Special–


  13. A.B. Thomas
    Nov 04, 2010 @ 20:39:07

    A sad tale, though it almost seems to be cruel to say that I enjoyed the read, I did…..


  14. megzone
    Nov 04, 2010 @ 23:24:50

    OMG.. 😐
    i hope its fiction.. its sad to lose someone 😦


  15. The Reason You Come
    Nov 05, 2010 @ 02:37:22

    I’m sorry about this tragic event in your life. I hope that it will get better and “a miracle is found”. I have loved ones who are reckless, and I can only wish that they’ll never have to learn their lesson the hard way.


  16. hedgewitch
    Nov 05, 2010 @ 07:48:07

    Point of view here is very effective, stepping inside and outside the situation without losing the immediacy or the pain. People don’t listen because none of us believe it will happen to us–it’s human…and tragic.


  17. -3-
    Nov 05, 2010 @ 11:36:50

    Your poem works very well – evoking deep emotion while slowly unveiling the subject. It builds questions in my head, unravels and answers them with questions to the heart. I hope capturing it in words helped to ease the pressures that inspired it.


  18. poethead
    Nov 06, 2010 @ 07:44:52

    the images evoke a labyrinth of lost, it must be hard to step away
    and to write dispassionately.

    An English poet called Tony Harrison writes about memory in his
    wonderful Alzheimer’s poem ‘Black Daisies for the Bride’ if you can locate
    the BBC video and watch it or hear it- the images he evokes about
    women’s loss of memory and their youths is evocative and poignant.

    C knowing someone who
    suffers from brain injury and how they experience time is quite difficult
    for everyone involved- sorry


    • LoLa
      Nov 06, 2010 @ 09:02:32

      I think that is why it may seem so cold to you or disspassionate. Just stepping in close enough to write about it was huge for me. Reading it back made me cry and my sister cry as well. I appreciate your comments but i think this was as deep as I was willing or able to go at this point.


  19. industrialarts
    Nov 06, 2010 @ 15:10:27

    very powerful piece. made me sad… as someone who has lived a reckless life it made me pause and contemplate…


  20. Jingle
    Nov 06, 2010 @ 16:28:44

    Hello, how are you?
    return favors to poets who are here for you,
    do 18 NEW comments….
    let me know after you are done.
    Thanks for the attention!
    Happy Saturday! xxx

    here is mine:


  21. Jessicas Japes
    Nov 07, 2010 @ 00:43:43

    That’s very well written, about a difficult subject. Very sad yet you handle it so that we don’t end up tearful.


  22. LoLa
    Nov 07, 2010 @ 09:01:58

    thank you everybody for all of your kind words.


  23. Marlee-I Mystic
    Nov 07, 2010 @ 11:38:03

    Beautifully spoken, wonderful rhythm and a profound amount of compassion. Beautiful piece.


  24. Jingle
    Nov 07, 2010 @ 12:48:29

    have a fun vacation,
    get it done by Wednesday.


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  26. mairmusic
    Nov 09, 2010 @ 11:20:15

    The locked-in vibe comes across wonderfully– nice write!


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